My Villanelle. I don't know if I did it correctly, but I tried!
I fear this to be the end
I'm scared that's why I push it away
But I know death is not the end
A comfort it is to have my friends
Even though the times are grey
I fear this to be the end
It feels like I deeper, deeper descend
I think about it night and day
But I know death is not the end
Sometimes I think the time is misspent
It's myself who I try to betray
I fear this to be the end
Of course I try before them to pretend
Then it's them who I betray
But I know death is not the end
Now it's time for me to transcend
yet, I know I'm only halfway
I fear this is the end
But I know death is not the end
I'm scared that's why I push it away
But I know death is not the end
A comfort it is to have my friends
Even though the times are grey
I fear this to be the end
It feels like I deeper, deeper descend
I think about it night and day
But I know death is not the end
Sometimes I think the time is misspent
It's myself who I try to betray
I fear this to be the end
Of course I try before them to pretend
Then it's them who I betray
But I know death is not the end
Now it's time for me to transcend
yet, I know I'm only halfway
I fear this is the end
But I know death is not the end
cool you are back and cool you tried your hand on a villanelle. well done for your first one! you understood the form and the rhymes are good. small suggestion: i would't use the same word (end) for A1 and A2 because then you have this word 8 times in your villanelle - and this - for my taste is quite a lot..
AntwortenLöschenwhat i absolutely loved was that you were able to put this deep and thought-provoking content into the form. nicely done---write on!!